The Lost Love [Ep. 5 U2] [SpeedPostX]

Okay, so what was the point of introducing Thena if you’re JUST going to cock block with her – and she actively wants to kill him??? She doesn’t likely know who he was back then, or what he can still do now… or she wouldn’t be this level of pig headed about trying to beat a guy that even lapsed in training (Unnecessarily, because if he was that skilled and that trained, it’s NOT a discipline you EVER stop) he could still hand her her head. She and ALL of the girls associated with this mystery “Mistress” bitch NEED to be bent over a table and bred. By the MC. Soon. There DO NOT need to be more antagonists than MC can deal with, or more accurately, you as the writer/dev are willing to LET him deal with. Again fuck right off with the gorilla characters, and that includes the muscle bound bitch with the knife in the ring in your teaser trailer scenes at the end of the update Genius. No one’s going to want to fuck that…

On that note: Fuck you on EVERY POSSIBLE LEVEL for having June SHOOT at MC AFTER HE JUST GOT PUT IN THE HOSPITAL… AND THEN letting the idiot who just got done confessing she’d “choose him” over her illegally gained porn collection of him and his girls, tell him NOT to reciprocate by putting June immediately out the fucking window. Seriously; what the fuck is wrong with you??? Have you ever been in a fight for your life situation Dev? Because I can tell you as a fighter at heart – ANYONE tries to take my life from me is going to fucking pay dearly for the attempt. Even if I have to go down with them. Don’t give a fuck if it’s a woman or a man. They DIE. No question; just instinct to protect yourself.

Also, if Penny is that horny to suggest that Jill go fuck some rich dick she doesn’t want; why is she in the damned HAREM game? Unless you put her on the menu, she serves no goddamned point except to either be a massive cock tease, or an active cock block to an already confrontational female WHO DOES NOT GET TO BE BETTER AT MARITIAL ARTS than your supposed “Bad Assed Boogey Man MC” just because you rendered her Asian. She’s basically a slightly ripped pipe cleaner for fuck sakes. Do you know nothing about physics, or the actual mechanics in battle? She would go down HARD if MC hits her even once; and NO ONE can dodge every single attack. (Barring the best stated boxer ever to live, long ago who won the olympics in ancient Greece by purportedly never making a single punch and just being outright able to tire out his oppenents by dodging their PUNCHES) It does not include kicks or Submission moves, and frankly she’s built that way whether she wants to admit it or not… so what the fuck are you actually doing? Also – WAY too much lesbianism to call this a fucking Harem: Harem is the girls are ALL focused on ONE guy. Period. They do NOT focus as much on each other, and if they did, it would be more to catch HIS attention. Because anything else confuses the narrative that they DO want him to keep. Or to be seens as worthy of being kept by HIM. Jesus, I do not get how all of you who write this stuff don’t understand that bloody point. It’s the core of the goddamned GENRE! Polyamory is everyone fucks everyone, and generally it will not last – it’s a relationship that’s built to CRUMBLE. Not endure in the sense of a proper built Harem story. : /

You have too many enemies waiting in the wings, not enough connectivity to the two characters who are “True Neutral” alligned at best, as the heroes to anyone that could actively counter the “armies” they’re purportedly up against – and you’re keeping all the damned girls in the dark about what he fucking IS. Why? That’s only going to cause more bullshit when they invariably do find out – and this thing with Jennifer “Protecting Mika” has to stop. Do NOT dance around the issue: does she love/want to keep him or not? Because if so, she needs to fess up and actively NOT act like a bitch every time MC wants to help her. Fucking hell. Also, stop with all the tease shots and get to the actual sex. And why in the fuck did you introduce two perfectly fine LI as fiancees… That’s just massively convoluted to get them into MC’s bed, and stinks of only MORE cock teasing. No bueno. They are BOTH going to be fucking him; and you set it up that Rei likes to watch… so it’s not unsalvageable, but it would’ve been better done to have them just be best friends that sometimes fuck where one is Bi openly, and the other is Bi Curious (it’s not the same thing) so that they’re both INTERESTED Openly in MEN to at least some stated degree. They can be together, but not that serious, and pursue the same guy that way, and it’s much less trouble in that can of worms. You already have like five gangs and potentially cops on MC/Jill’s hit list, plus the bullshit shadow squad that for some reason wants MC’s head… except Mistress says no. Again: WHY??? If the “mistress” is Eve, get on clarifying that. Why did she leave, what the fuck happened to her to make her capable to lead a shadow organization that for all we know is just another gang waiting to MC and Jill to take down, and if it’s someone else, be specific that Eve is DEAD. Not coming back, never meant to leave him and got in trouble he couldn’t get her out of… Something. For fuck sakes. But THIS point is why you DON’T need drama inside the Harem! That time shown is meant to build endearments, and strengthen ALL accepted relationships. Have hot lewd secenes to appreciate the audiences dilligence in playing through your meandering storyline. Not to antagonize the MAIN CHARACTER for any reason. Especially to the point it looks like any of the given girls DON’T actually want him.