Bite: Season One [v0.7.5a Ep.8 P1] [Blue Dragon Studios]

Gave it another shot after a length of updates – First: Harem. You put it in the tags; it’s a HAREM GAME. There do NOT get to be “SIDE” girls. Amy and Jessica better have more to do in the story – and it’s especially bullshit that you made the change to Amy confesses to having a crush on MC and then you do the mental dominance crap (Which she SHOULD recall that he did with her by the way as she literally suggested she wanted to have sex immediately for fuck sakes, so it’s NOT a consent issue * She does not have to recall that he’s a vampire and if MC is all that “intelligent” as Lisa thinks, he should know that) Here’s hoping she does get knocked up; because you’ve not been careful with the internal cum shots (and believe me I don’t mind; but it should still be PLAYER CHOICE) So that could be another means to introduce her into the harem without having her randomly decide to play up the bad girl and fuck MC with her friend in an ally.

* Amy can be a technopath (Magic Vs. Technology = Magic controls technology, but that’s the ONLY magic she has)
[You say there’s different clans of witch. So don’t even try to tell me you couldn’t think of that. She’s Forge with tits, you’re done, and she has a place in the harem]

* Jessica: Necromancer. A group of “speakers for the dead” who are classically taken for dark witches; but are something else entirely. Consider it like a psychic, tuned to a specific frequency and call it a gift she doesn’t want but can’t escape. MC has a viable reason to help her (And I recall that in the original version of this game – which we will get to, don’t worry – you had a crazy mom character with a zombie in the basement; so again don’t tell me you can’t think of this) BOTH of the girls and in fact ANY girl you render even remotely attractive, SHOULD be a harem option.

While we’re on the subject you fucked up the elf’s face. She looked WAY hotter in the original version. This remake is also literally a carbon copy of the old story – with minimal extra bits added in, and screw you entirely for “this scene will be added in the next update” [That means there’s NO POINT in going past that presented binary choice, genius’] Also, if you’re going to do sex scenes with any girl, or imply that sex can be had with any girl that isn’t listed: LIST THEM. They belong in the harem. The prophecy never said MC is bound to just one girl of any race. There was no inclusion of the orcs yet, so I don’t know why they were even rendered; since they only appear in a dream sequence (and two of them that were NOT kids in the original version WERE rendered that way for WHAT REASON?) You CAN make a longer list of females and I guarantee you most players won’t mind at all. So far half the list you do have is still “Unknown.”

The original story was further along, and I’d argue decently enough fleshed out that I have no freaking clue why you’d bother rebooting it. As well you made Diego pizza face for no reason, and I think you rendered MC’s mom a lot less attractive. I’m also hoping that if the dark witch is going to be that much of an over confident twit; you get to bend her over the table to “steal my power” in the vein of breeding the fuck out of her. She wants it so badly, she can have my kid. Maybe it’ll kill her doing it. Seems a fair enough trade (If he’s The Chosen One meant to play Ghandi for all the races, no one says all of the harem members have to be sunshine and rainbows – and if he’s the most powerful supernatural being PROVE IT. She can be BDSM content for all I give a crap, in the end game. But for those players that do stick around while you re-write the same story you’ve already written, reward them appropriately for getting to the end game)

* Also fuck you. NOTHING can kill MC. He’s the crux of your story and if he’s got that much “I Haz All The Powars” then he has NONE of their weakness’. A stake can’t kill him; sunlight can’t kill him, Silver can’t kill him and magic can’t kill him. Why? Because at bare minimum IF he dies, you have no fucking game. It’s fine that Lisa is for the moment considering him to be a “normal” vampire but you’d better get her into the notion that if he’s the Chosen One for realsies, HE is the RULING VAMPIRE. Also don’t mention cheating on her like they’re some sort of Couple. They have a bond; but it’s NOT a full relationship, and frankly even in the original game it was never asserted to be until AFTER she “allowed” him to create the harem. Which again, is NOT her call. She can be okay with it, but if it’s what He wants and frankly is part of your recommendations in walkthrough paths, then Lisa is NOT the one to call the damned shots. I will credit at least at one point you did show the fucker has red eyes. Like Daddy Not So Dearest, by the time his parents actually spill the beans. [There should also definitely be an option to tell both of them to absolutely go fuck themselves for what they pulled on MC. Period – I was made to leave home at 16, and I can guaran-fucking-tee you that NO ONE IN THEIR RIGHT MIND IS GOING TO DO THAT TO A 12 YEAR OLD! 15 maybe. MAYBE. Even then without Emancipation it’s not legal.

I still don’t forgive you for that bullshit castration scene. I fastforwarded through it; but I really, really should not have had to. No, I don’t give a flying rat’s ass if it was a nightmare. It’s WAY too fucking personal. Again, if the Evil Witch wants him on HER SIDE the seduce me angle is the best way to go. Not I’m going to cut your cock off and make a potion with it, but let you see that’s what I want to do. Jesus Christ guys. Come on. There are some things even the Supernatural Ghandi SHOULDN’T forgive… Personally I will wait for about five more updates to give you a fair chance to get back to where you were. But if you pull any more castration level shit, or stop listing girls for relationship points while adding new ones, I will call it a dead project.

Amy. Jessica. The female Teacher. The Orc Queen at least… ALL of them. Hell maybe even MC’s mom if you really insist on adding incest (though again, I’m glad for once there is no patch – it’s just a shame to render her so attractive and then muck it up a bit but still have her be attractive, if you’re not eventually going to go somewhere with that) Also, Nancy needs more focus and Emily needs to stop dicking around with the I know something you don’t know if they actually wants to be part of the harem. (You were focusing TOO MUCH ON LISA in the original game; and I haven’t forgotten the bar girls either. They’re included on the list too – First girl does not always mean best girl, and she’s not the only one MC is meant to “bond” with) If you can add in a sister that Diego never had, you can at least add Amy and Jessica. Jesus.

Also, no fairies. Just once, in a harem – no midget women with massively unrealistic expectations on what they can handle going into them. I can handle elves, I can handle dark mages who might actually want redemption (IE at least the two protege’s who probably aren’t as assholish as their Mistress) but I’ve had enough of pixies and fairies being added into games where they don’t have the option to become a REAL GIRL. So if you’re going to include one, try a growth potion that doesn’t focus on MC’s dick. That way she might actually survive trying to go to pound town with him. There’s size queen, there’s masochist and there’s I’m literally looking to kill myself trying. Guess which one the Fairie is. How’s that for a puzzle sequence for you?

Update the android link mna what the hell

This VN is all about 2 words “chosen One” and “prophecy”. It’s really unbearable to see these words repeatedly. Renders, animations both are average. Storyline is below average. Dev is seriously wasting his time as well as everyone’s time. This VN seriously needs rerendering.