Reunion [Ch. 4] [Mr Georgie]

For me, the last chapter – and one specific tease line in the last chapter that’s uttered by your neice – ruins the game.

Dude; if you want a dating sim and ONLY a dating sim, KEEP it a dating sim and DO NOT mention harems. Ever. At all.
The neice is like 14 tops and really shouldn’t frigging know what one is. (She should maybe barely know what frigging is, frankly) And while we’re on the subject… IF you ARE going to add a Harem end, implement it properly. Make your sister in law fight with her husband (perhaps over her always having wanted another child and knowingly running out of the clock, with MC’s brother being resistent) so that MC can have a chance at her.

As it stands, I did try to make the harem happen and the black assistant found out I was dating more than her, and got pissed off. Immediately calling me an asshole and yeeting out of the game, which was an abrupt 180 and actually reflects badly on what you were trying to build with her character down the Love Path, because even on it she’s fairly freaking guarded no matter what. It comes off as less than genuine. She can be hurt, but she DOES NOT get to be a bitch about it if she was being honest about caring for him or feeling bad for what he’s been through, since she knows. She SHOULD take into account that might have MAYBE seriously scarred him, in ways that don’t lead to a traditional relationship. Jesus. Besides, it’s actually more effective to make the MC feel guilty, and if she was that smart she would know it. Which would lead to her allowance, and it can be written grudgingly, even though it’s what she hoped to pan out, of the ability to talk things out. So he can apologize (for once being entirely justified) – The problem here being there was not a choice to avoid her becoming aware at one specific point = you threw a monkey wrench into the attempt needlessly. That pisses me off, deeply. As I said, it’s fine if that’s not the genre you want and you’re set on that point. But, BE CLEAR on that.

I did try all of the currently available routes. I was least pleased with Fuck Me Teacher, since she’s least likely to be able to breed, and frankly you ended the game with the highschool trophy who ended up MC’s sweetheart STILL not even hinted at BEING pregnant. Nevermind married, or engaged. (As I recall, I admit at that point I skipped over some text because I was less engaged myself) If there was mention they were going to be, I missed that. Which means most of your audience probably will as well. The visual tells in that case, ARE important. With as hard as Granny I’m Not Dead Yet was pushing for it, I would’ve thought at least every girl would get an end scene with a ring and a belly bulge. Or a mention they were well on their way to both. Again, except the blonde. If she’s got a daughter that’s twenty ish years old, the time for new sisters and brothers IS past. Which frankly despite how hard you want the audience to believe MC was invested in this woman, is most of the reason she SHOULD NOT have been pursuable. At all. She can be friends, and cheerlead for her daughter. She’s okay to be a grounding point for the emotional heart of the story, but most of the reason people build relationships whether they’re conscious of the point – or would openly admit it, even to themselves – or not, IS to build a family. Whether or not right now, or just some day.

The stuff with the father/aunt and the doc at the end, was pointless, and can say more about you than it will your audience’s opinion quite frankly. It’s forced, and there for politics. [Now tell me that the MC was in fact the Doc’s SON and I would be like, okay… that’s a good twist and explains a lot] The stuff with MC’s ex wanting to suddenly crawl back was not necessary. I get that it’s there if you REALLY fuck up, but it shouldn’t be necessary. Frankly the only way a player can fuck this game up is by choice. There can just be an I’m good alone path as well. All in all, it had some potential. Though I cop I was less of a fan of the art style. The incredibly thirsty pool attendant was also a good chance to “corrupt” annie into a threeway, as acceptance of Bi if you want to do politics the right/semi subtle way. Which would also honor player choice, and the idea that some relationships can be open. With the right person, as well as deeply invested. Just going to say.

Not sure I can recommend this one, until it’s actually finished. Not just paying lip service to the point the game does in fact have an ending. I would say however, keep trying. There were some good points in the story; though with the assistant, asking her to stay with the MC shouldn’t be seen as the selfish choice, and should not cost him points. There’s an argument to be made that shows his investment in the relationship (if one has in fact been started – and she sticks with him anyway, outside of her new work, so it’s needlessly jarring just for forced Female Empowerment)