Rebirth [Ep.5 Update 7] [LikesBlondes]

To those who state this isn’t a sex game; it is. The problem being less that the writing is not good than the fact it’s actually based a little TOO strictly off the TTRPG Vampire The Masquerade from White Wolf. In that game, vampires CAN have sex, but it does cost them blood points to do so. Personally I think latitudes could be taken to make more actual chances to feed, upon whom and have it tie into building of power. Building of relationships and the actual formation of a Harem. Which really is what this game should be. The setting IS about the politics of power and climbing the ranks. Who you do that with, how you do should be up to player choice. The “blood dolls” or ghouls as they’re more commonly called (especially the main one but I can see them trying for Carmen too) did NOT need to become vampires. It’s FINE that the MAIN LI *** It’s what you’re billing her as the second you turn her into a vampire buddy, since you’ve been dicking people around HARD with Sharon this long. I’ll say no pun intended, but feel free to count it as an example of good writing *** is the MC’s Ghoul. Friend. Yeah, call me the Cryptkeeper, at least I’m not sleeping in one. That you guys know of.

The problem is more in the pacing and the lack of clear direction. There are too many females placed above the supposedly “unique” MC in power. Either by rank in the social structure of the lain out world by the rulesets of Vampire The Masquerade, or the BS that the dev can’t figure out who MC’s Mommy should really be. [I do give some credit for doffing the actual mother – to a point, but do you really think a woman as nosy as she is, as needy as she came off would just disappear into the sunset because MC had one meet up with her so it’s fine now? Come on] Calisto needs to either NOT be such an asshole, or clearly become submissive to the MC because she chooses him for her partner. You need to let go of the red dream girl bullshit; or get somewhere with that plot and DO NOT make her more powerful than the MC without A) a damned good reason and B) the opportunity for the MC to actually WIN against her. If you’re actually setting her up to be the antagonist. [Nobody liked the invincible werewolf at the end of VTMB man, or woman as it may be… there’s NO point to an Antagonist you cannot defeat; and no a freaking magical athame that you have to play nice with your asshole vamp mommy whether you want to or not, does not count. Since it also DIDN’T WORK]

I would have focused on MC navigating the world to take down Markus or whatever you called the meathead archon. Focus on TAMING Astrid in general (yes with MC’s cock) and working out the dynamic between Sharon and her to SHARE MC. With Lauren or whatever BFF to hell and back quite literally is supposed to be named. The relationships, and the RISE TO POWER are what matter in this type of game. Sex IS included in that. Blood points or not. Each of the power branches that you chose to create [Not just stealth or Charisma] should have been VIABLE to give the MC a means to make his way to the THRONE. Because he SHOULD end up the Prince of a City. If not before that, a Methuselah. (If the BBEG is Antidiluvian that would be the only way the Player MIGHT have a genuine shot – with all Harem points built up and empowered, and all Allies called – to go to war with the creature who’s now more a point of straight up mindfuckery as a plot device than a viable Antagonist, and to WIN) ** Hell you want to include Furry you can also stipulate the MC is more Gangrel than anything and actually have him bloodbond a werewolf to help take down the big bad at the end of the day. Just a thought, but then he might more like it doggy…

It’s nice that someone did their homework on the core rules (which frankly have already been a little bent if I’m honest) but that doesn’t excuse the lack of lewd scenes in this work. It doesn’t explain the muddled pace, and the lack of a focused direction. For my two cents thrown into the pond, these are the areas you need to work on:

– Improve relationships with all current females to the point it actually LOOKS like you’re making clear progress.

– Branch out the vampire powers in skill sets that make ALL of those possible choices viable.

– Come up with new stuff for both of the above at some point soon.

– Figure out where you want to take the narrative; but offer the player choice that is clear, as to their ending.

– If you’re going to make Ghouls or Blood Dolls, they DO NOT get to be full vampires because… Female. Fuck. That.

– Figure out whose actual side you want Calisto to be on. Including just her own (with a sub option to MC in a dominance battle he CAN win, by player choice * You can logic it out by she cares for him more than she shows, and WANTS to lose but can’t admit it openly)

– Play the long game [The correct way] IE give the audience of a sex site what we expect to see when we waste gigs/time downloading these games. Build a viable path to power that is more than just hey you’re a vampire so you’re a superhero… or you would be, if you weren’t a total NEWB! (Making Sharon the Archon was an asshole move, and no I do NOT forgive it just because you sometimes, somehow let MC call HER shots for her – since she only succeed by New Boy’s help and anyone with enough pull knows it, they should ALWAYS have been JOINT archons. Not privately said because Sharon decides she’s been blue balling the relationship so long she might as well throw the player a halfway bone for being a “good boy”)

– STOP. Playing. Mind. Games. With. Your. Audience! The red dreams were an intriguing plot device for about five freaking seconds, but if you’re not going to do anything but muck with the player’s head with them, you’re being a Malkavian… and you should know how annoying most people find them. [There’s a reason that clan is only recommended for the 2ND playthrough of VTMB – and probably more safely a third or fourth, unless you wrote down EVERY response in the game]

– Introduce back in the trainers and let the PLAYER choose to TRAIN the powers if they want, so they can actually TRY to fight things without your need of a Duex Ex Mommy Save My Arse with a magic dagger (that’s arguably a dick commentary if we want to get Freudian about it) that still DOES NOT WORK. If you’ve read up on the rules of the core game enough to bend the sex options over a table to take them all but out of the game for being “bad girls” then you should know how rare a true Antidiluvian is. The Big Bad does NOT have to actually be one. (She can seem like it, and be older than Calisto while technically being of the same Generation) ** I’m saying don’t try to pull a rabbit out of your arse to make an impossible to beat “credible threat.” The Main Character still Has to win at the end. Even if Pyrrhically.

Now all that said, it’s a game that I still think, does have a LOT of potential. A little better structure in the story, a few new options for women to bond with, and an actual sense of power to gain and you have one hell of a V:TM campaign (My luck you’ll take that literally – which could still be cool… but I didn’t name my MC Lucifer) I’m not tapped out yet, but I can also understand where most of your hoped for audience would be. Keep going, work at your own pace, and hopefully you take this review more for the constructive criticism and genuine attempt to help foster creativity that I intend. I am after all, the one who first wrote: Red Dreams Are Made To Tease… so who am I to disagree?

what’s new in this update? cuz changelog is ep2 up4 while version is ep 4 up10. Also there is no patreon page.