My New Memories [v0.4] [Killer7]

First impressions of the game: If you don’ know the specifics of how to handle a patient with any given diagnosis – DO NOT write the game!

This man has amnesia. In MOST cases, the memories do not come back. In many, not at all, but in more of them than not, it’s going to be partial. The best would be full recollection, but that depends on the brain. Family members as connective tissure are best NOT to try to force things. Because of basic human ANIMAL nature. ASSHOLE. That bullshit with the blonde, she knows he was in an accident. The first thing she does is tell him to leave – THIS. IS. NOT. THE. GAME. FOR. TSUNDERE. CHARACTERS!

That will not get her what she wants. Nor is it ANY sort of professionalism for a cop to be so damned passive aggressive. Did you fucking think about the fact that the cop should be the first one to believe that if she DOESN’T share her relationship with the wife he can’t recall correctly at all; the very first thing this already traumatized patient who has also been unfairly antagonized for no reason, will think is that Anna was CHEATING on him. [I don’t care that there is no NTR – and I am happy about that as much as the Harem tag = but this guy is a blank slate. Period. He has NO BIAS one way or the other at the moment to make him think anyone is his friend, or loyal to him. He knows nothing about the state of his marriage and you fucking wrote that yourself. Jesus.

Having the blonde daughter be JUST as antagonistic as Jessica was fucking retarded. Writing the line “My amnesia is no excuse” made me see red. You dumbass. It isn’t an excuse! It’s a diagnosis. He didn’t mean to get in the accident; it happened to him, and she is acting for the words of her aunt whom she should NOT trust so fiercely if she has any sort of love like you’re trying to build up that she does, like he just intentionally forgot them. Fuck you. On SO. MANY. LEVELS. I may never have had amnesia but I can tell you how most people would react with this introduction and it would be to write the whole lot of them off. You do not make the characters that care about the MC antagonize him in a harem game. For any reason; but most especially if you start down the I literally can’t recall any of you, or why I should give a fuck you’re still breathing path. They want him to stay – fine. Make them act like they want that.

If the officer is eventually going to end up hand-fasted to him, and preggers: Fine. But don’t write the term “I’m not your enemy.” With a cop. Who should freaking no better than to treat any sort of hospitalized patient the way that MC has been treated. Fuck what relationship she and MC’s WIFE had… she would be at least reported for misconduct. You CAN’T divide the woman from the officer. They are the same. She should be written to a) value the authority and power of the badge but b) realize that as a human being who is genuinely (or not – in the way that you have currently written her in this intro) trying to help this man that the worse presentation she could make is to withhold information. He. Can’t. Remember. A. FUCKING. Thing! Do you have any god damned idea how frustrating that is?!? Can you even imagine – oh, no wait, you can’t. I know this because you wrote it a fucking thousand times already. Jesus. She withheld pertinent info from MC. She withheld belongings of the family (for all MC knows she was going to steal them – and don’t even try to pull But, she’s a Cop… It doesn’t mean she can’t be a corrupt one genius) She has tried to dictate terms that are not going to help her solve this case. Which due to her personal involvement with the family whether the department knows it or not; she SHOULD NOT be allowed on. Do you have any god damned clue how fired she is, if the department finds her out. Because she at the least would be reprimanded and probably suspended without pay. If not fired and charged with obstruction of a police investigation, and justice therein.

– I do like her as far as the attractiveness and I’m not opposed to side characters, but if she’s not going to be in the harem she needs to be written to contribute to the story WELL enough to ingratiate her to your audience and actually BE OF HELP. I will keep playing for now. Do note: There is only so much suspension of disbelief “Twin Magic!” covers. If Anna taking a nap is just means to draw the building of the harem out… fuck off. Their connection can exist in a coma state, but there is the problem of audience frustration and all of the sites you design these damned games on incentivizing giving your subscribers and the free to play fans, blue balls. Story over lewd is fine; as long as the story SERVES the lewds. I don’t mind reading, as you can probably see from any given comment I’ve made on this site… but you should know what most of us are here for. It’s NOT the story. Personally if I want that, I know from the fact I have written now up to my 34rth fully completed series, that I can write better than 95% of games on this site. Writing there will be more story than sex scenes is fine. Writing that if sex is what you’re here for, this isn’t the game for you, is judging the majority of your hoped for audience. *Golf Claps* Well done. Are we sure it’s not you who can’t cook a decent steak? That kind of thing will cost you more potential subscribers than it ever earns. You’re already covering difficult subject matter you obviously don’t have a clue how to handle, and trying to shoehorn it into a genre that is difficult enough to juggle investments with, when the MC knows exactly who he is. [Tsundere is a troupe that really, REALLY needs to die, by the way. It’s not attractive, and it will not get any woman what she actually wants. Kill it with fire, because it doesn’t show her as strong willed. It shows she’s too weak to actually go after what she does want, because she can’t even fucking admit it]

One last thing: Fuck you that any of the three “younger” girls are above the age of 14. Double fuck you for Morgan’s trans option. [At least it is optional but it really does not need to be there] The girls don’t need to be as tall or set in features as Sabrina, but go look at pictures of any 18 or 21 year old. Then look at what you designed those three to look like; and tell me you don’t think they are anywhere from 12-15 max. There’s also no grounds for a dark brunette and whatever the hell MC looks like – unless he is a combination of Blonde and that strawberry hue that would more make him Ash blonde to true Gold in hair color, to have kids with three different hair colors. Unless the three of them were born to different women that DO match those hair colors. If it’s a clue as to what’s coming; not subtle. If it’s not… you don’t know how genetics actually work, do you?

Loved the story and hope this is not abandoned . I like that is not all about sex and has a story to it.