My Dorm [v0.21.2 S3 Ch.1] [Tropecita Games]

Hey, I just want to say well done, and thank you. Original content and everything is fresh. Readers should never direct the author as the story is unveiled. We’re along for the ride, people! Give constructive criticism only, or, if you’re providing financial assistance, provide criticism that will be taken under review with all the other paid subscriber suggestions. And, that said, fuck you to anyone that shames a character for real life choices or wants development to happen ‘fast’ because of their desires. Life happens as the author allows it, and the author, in this case, appreciates realistic goals and transformations.

The game should called “My Harem”. The animations are now much better, as in the beginning. But sadly for me I assume some patreons ask him to include “normal” looking girls and now there are a bunch of ugly students, I avoid by any chance to approach.

I’ve followed your work since many updates now.

The last one angered and disappointed me about Scarlett’s virginity (she should know using a dildo means she’s NOT one – you didn’t write her with down’s syndrome. She’s going deaf)

This current one, didn’t do much to improve my disposition to the work from this point forward if I’m honest.
– The My Residence bit with Debbie almost literally marks her out as a self insert (which she shouldn’t be)
The reference being close enough to My New Family, and other harem games I have played have one point in common that your story lacks; They allowed for some level of Sci Fi or fantasy, by introducing a middle sister as a cat girl for no reason. Or super powers, basically from the start.

– You hinted at a clone idea (that I took more as the safety net in case the player made bad choices – rather than something that the plot was ever going to actually try to take seriously : / ) Clones, do not live that long. Look up Dolly.
On that note, the explanation to read was recommended; and it was NOT at all good at clarifying fuck and all. You used bar codes instead of the girls’ actual names. So BOTH ways, MC knows the answer (or can assume that he’s close and able to investigate) but the PLAYER is sitting here like WTF were you on when you wrote this out??? If Eva & Amanda are end game add ins, fine and fair enough. But two problems:

– First = You did NOT stipulate this game had much in the vein of Sci Fi, and have tried to GROUND it in realistic topics thus far. Barring a few bad meta references as “jokes” (which also were not that funny…) What was HINTED at I took, and I’m sure many others did for how effectively you’ve gone for the daily slice of life aspect in plot thus far, for a subconscious safety net. Don’t worry about the choices, if you make the wrong one, there’s no real game over type deal. MC would wake the next day with a headache he couldn’t explain and no memory of the night before and off you go on your way to continue building the Harem. Yay?

– Second = You risk jarring your audience and looking like you’ll just pull whatever random dues ex out of your ass. If the plot goes too nonsense all of a sudden when you’ve tried fairly much to make it a “day in the life” deal and as normal as possible… suspension of disbelief only carries so far. Which segues into…

– The Father: You can call it semi resolved all you want = you just added in a half sister. Admitted he actually DID cheat on MC’s blood mother, so everything he was accused of was correct; with the wrong woman. Fuck. This. Character. And if he is the third scientist somehow, I can see exactly why he was disinherited… but as I said, you mentioned a boyfriend, not a husband. So that explanation doesn’t necessarily compute that MC’s Father should be hunted or ever again dealt with at all. The ONE fucking time he should have come clean and redeemed himself (or GIVEN THE PLAYER A FUCKING CLUE WHO THE HELL IT COULD BE???) you write him drunk dialing. For again, “comedy” that’s really. REALLY. Not Funny.

The issue about Samira the MC does NOT have to think about or consider. He didn’t like that she was buggering off to start with – and her not telling him would be not to spoil a surprise. Besides = She’s literally buggered off half way across the world. Even if she knew she regretted it, SHE is obviously smart enough to understand she might not get the best reception. Considering how otherwise insightful you tend to try to make MC SEEM, I do not why you’d write the line in the vein of “I need to think about this…” Fuck. That. By picking the choices that were recommended, and frankly asserting we WANT her back throughout the few points we even had the option, there’s NOTHING TO THINK ABOUT!!!
She. Is. His. Girl. Period. Otherwise why the fuck did you write her into a HAREM?

Kim doing the make up thing is just you dicking around the audience and admitting “Why yes; I could have rendered her this way the whole time since we already have one or two disabled people at the moment… and I said fuck it. Let’s make her look Calico. Because DEI rules me” Making the point that it might not be a bad idea to cover up if she’s THAT insecure about the fucking condition is NOT the NEGATIVE. Are you disabled? Do you know what the fuck it feels like to have every fucking kid you want to make friends with usually ask not first “what’s your name?” Like they normally would, but “Why Do You Walk Like That?” Then ask what my name is? No… Then fuck off with the politics. You can render the damned hot girl whichever way you like. Make her silver with fucking indigo polka dots and I’d probably still have MC do her… but don’t get on a fucking soap box and call it a NEGATIVE choice to want to be NORMAL. Not if you don’t know what it’s like to be different, when most of the world was born fine. She’ll have her scars – THEY. SHOULD. BE. RESPECTED!!! Or as I have said, you could have tried rendering her with ONE skin tone and she would look just the same as that bullshit scene. White, black I don’t care which. She’s still gorgeous.

Last point, and very likely the last time I will bother with this game despite having completed a save file for part 2. (I can at least appreciate you’re smart enough to keep the file sizes under 5 gigs for those of us that do Free To Play, and I would laud you for that kindness) NTR & GILF. Really? You have to know how much a good chunk of players of these sorts of games HATE that content; and yes. I am one of them in general because NTR has to be handled carefully and under full player control – and it never really is except for maybe 2 of all the games I’ve played that have the content as “avoidable.” GILF is just a concept that does not need to exist… and you use it for company names = to make a freaking joke out of it?!? Are you trying to tank your supporters in one go? Again, dude… dudette or whatever the hell you want to call yourself(ves) you really have to get a better sense of humor. Think about how things WILL be taken. Not just how they can be. Because I guarantee you, some players even see those acronyms and they tap right the fuck out. They won’t even care from that point how you mean it or not.

So no. From this point, with the introduction TOO QUICKLY (and not to the FULL HAREM AT ONCE!) of the clone BULLSHIT coming out; from Maddie and the questionable BDSM stuff, from Scarlett’s bungled virginity, from the awkward cancer crap that you’re dragging out way too damned long for WHAT??? For the Dad being walked back after having to try to wrangle out that he MIGHT NOT have actually cheated on Martha to start with, For the fact it’s ALL going to go farther, faster and quirkier from now on… This is me. Tapping the fuck out. There’s no need to bother with a part 2. You made too many choices I personally don’t see as necessary, are jarring, or are overly political. Without understanding the points behind them. If YOU can’t respect your own story and your characters enough to take this shit as seriously as when you started, and write to the end a complete comprehensible story that engages with the specific niches you aimed at to begin with… then why should The Player? Whoever that might be.

Good luck to you. If you keep these choices up going forward I think you’re gonna need it.