Tribulations of a Mage [v0.28.0] [Talothral]

Story driven, and well done for the most part. But don’t play if you’re looking for eroticism–there is none. There are adult scenes and sex, but no eroticism. And, you have sex with strange things: an old saggy woman, an old halfling, a fairy (think lots of rubbing), an orc woman (you think it may be hot–it isn’t).

Good special effects, but simplistic animations; the only thing that moves is the guy’s hips, or the woman’s head, etc. So, again, play if you primarily want a D&D type story.

There is a game that I been looking for. Its the one where a black chick shits in a white dudes mouth. Any help is appreciated.

Look, Talothral, I’ve reviewed two of your other games on more than one sight. I’ve played both versions of Terminus Reach: Sentinel and Socerer. I will simply say what I’m beginning to note.

– You reuse (and very slightly change) most of your given main characters. Several that seem like they should (or even could have been mains) sometimes don’t get the time to shine they should. Terminus is probably on it’s third part atm – and if I’m right I would recommend no five year time jumps. Because unless you intended Sorcerer to be a one shot; you skipped to the part where most of the girls in that game gave birth… but you also skirted over a few that should have been lewd scenes shown properly. Like the secretary mage; and the medusa with glasses.

In Socerer (which this game is basically; just in a medieval rather than more modern setting – and I am detecting a bit of an influence from the recent show Shogun…) You made the asshole NOT QUITE mortal; turned him into a half Iffrit, and never actually answered whether or not that made him equal to a demigod – or could be ascended into a god. You left his mortality in question the whole game; and had everyone calling him mortal when he might not be. You in this game, DID NOT specify the MC’s race (It gives you an out to deus machina an answer for why he doesn’t die later… I use that trick myself sometimes) AND he COULD be anything. Also = Gods DO NOT interfere in the lives of anyone who’s “not that special.” Don’t fish-tail. He’s the hero of the game. He automatically IS special, and negging him like that may either jar, or insult your audience.

You have foibles, I get it. For whatever reason you don’t like the term Master (and have mentioned it in all three fucking games) but it does NOT have the kind of connotation in the sense it would be used by MC’s WOMEN that would be ascribed historically. Not every member of a harem was enslaved. Many did volunteer. Even then, a slave could in fact be favored over one who DID volunteer; so it’s not like they’d never have power. So long as they’d properly submit. The bond isn’t just I’m your master so I own you. It’s I own you, because you CHOOSE to call me your Master; and more importantly accept the binding implied. I’m personally VERY dominant minded, and it’s irked the hell out of me that you choose to deny a title they all want to drop at MC’s feet in EVERY of the three games so far you’ve made. He doesn’t have to care for the title, or what it represents. He doesn’t need to agree with it – but he FUCKING WELL SHOULD HONOR IT!

You also seem to have a thing for including unrealistically old women into your games as pursuable. Jesus Christ on Crutches do I wish you would lay the fuck off that habit. It’s NOT attractive, and wins you no favors. The inclusion in the story has never thus far been that helpful. They are listed as Side Characters. This falls under I don’t give a flying fuck about what your personal kinks are; and while I can respect that you have yours and I have much simpler ones, not EVERY kink needs to be undertaken. Also fuck the body positivity characters. You included the troll to get the water blessing for the Oracle in Sorcerer (that she only needed because you turned her into the fucking human torch for no reason) but it didn’t have to be a troll. Hell, it didn’t have to be an UGLY troll that was like a foot and a half taller and three hundred pounds heavier. For example; say that rumors of their vile and hideous looks were greatly exaggerated over several generations, by massively jealous wives and make them more muscular, diffierently skinned ELVES that also don’t ever need healing spells and could probably rip someone’s arms off. Aesthetics DO MATTER. You don’t do yourself ANY favors trying to challenge them. It will just cost you potential subs.

For myself, I put up with it because despite some awkwardly placed cliffhangers, and a LOT too much mystery surrounding each MC’s actual Mortality… you do craft intriguing stories. You like the long form story telling as much as I do, and you can hook the audience to pay attention to more than the tits and ass. [Though I will say dude, you run the actual lewd scenes a little too long for the same bloody repeat dialogues. It usually takes another actual half minute to get MC to show the EXTRA scene at the corner that shows he came inside of her; after she begs for his seed… and that’s TOO DAMNED LONG]

Also, there’s nothing stopping this MC from being a King. There’s no reason you should have cut that word off. If she’s going to note that an Emporer has one Emporess; call it Checkov’s Gun. You BETTER pull that trigger. The noble house bullshit you already pulled with the Sorcerer MC = we have no clue if Terminus MC is actually going to be the Fleet Admiral; and I’m tired of getting technically outranked… as the MOST DANGEROUS AND POWERFUL CHARACTER IN YOUR GAMES. [Tied to that, why do you keep trying to screw your MC’s over so hard? Terminus MC should be in a psyche ward at the very least… is some sort of MUTANT and frankly possibly immortal just due to the inclusion of that questionable fifth race… Sorcerer was again, half iffrit, but you make him a GED mage – and you did the same damned thing with this one. Who also has “half” his soul missing] * You could make him a secret Demigod; and maybe that’s why that scene with death goddess that said may have extra content later could get her involved in a consort rank. I’m NOT really big on the choices presented not being specific about what exactly I’m going to get out of each one. For a guy that writes cautious to overly paranoid MC’s… you should know that kind of thing pisses the audience off.

You have TWO massive plots going – and you’re going to need to resolve one, before getting to the more important one. I don’t mind if he ends up both the archmage and the emporer (you could actively make it stipulation for becoming the archmage) He NEEDS to ACTUALLY BE SHOWN TO GET HIS SOUL BACK… Without dumbfuck “consequences.” Then you need to be very, VERY clear about what exactly the Kitsune emporess is actually offering for his “REWARD.” Because it can’t be her; but it could be her daughter. Again, it could be the stipulation that by marriage to Ayaka (or whatever the hell her name is) he becomes just noble enough to be granted the title of Archmage = which allows him high enough rank to become the emporer as 2nd in Command, since the Emperor’s (Sue me: I haven’t slept yet, and yes I just realized I’ve been spelling that word wrong…) son is dead. There’s nothing saying he was the only one, and there’s NOTHING saying he wasn’t…

Contrary to some perceptions, I am fairly to very fond of your work. I do think you need to lay off certain troupes, and actually let the one who’s strong enough to RULE, do so. By title and deed at the end of the game. I’d impress me if you do that just once. In any of the games you may have planned to come. I’m going to follow this one to the end. Like I have with the others, but fair warned = If you pull the “Not a Master”/fucking MUCH older/Aesthetically UGLY women bullshit in a fourth game… good writing or not I will tap out. [You also wouldn’t have to have two main quests going, or come up with so much deus ex bull if you’d stop writing your Mains into corners that only “divine” intervention can get them out of…]